This 8-sentence snippet is unrelated to my others. It comes from my short story entitled Rapunzel which was published in DM du Jour, a blog associated with the online magazine Danse Macabre.
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– 8-sentence snippet from Rapunzel –
When he reached the top and saw her, he was mesmerized. She was the most beautiful woman in all the lands and he wanted her for his wife. They vowed their undying love to each other and consummated their union of the heart. He left through the window, swearing to return after he informed his father of the wondrous beauty he had found.
That is how the story of her tower spread – by word of mouth amonst the courtiers and servants, then peasants and tradesmen till it was known to all the lands. And the prince? He remained true to his word like a valiant prince should and rode to the tower the next day.
He did not return.
– End snippet –
I’ve always loved fairytales and have been toying with my Rapunzel idea since I was in college and had to write an essay in Japanese for my Japanese language class. Yep! My idea started out 100% in Japanese. I was in either the 300 or 400 level class so I was almost done with my minor.
It started off with a horror story (written in Japanese for Japanese class) about a grad student who’s working late at night in their building. At the time I was really into Japanese horror so I tried to emulate the style etc in my story. Despite getting low marks on my essay (I’ve always sucked at Japanese), I loved the story’s idea. So the next time we had a similar assignment, I wrote Rapunzel.
That early draft was like a condensed version of what currently stands published and it focused more on the ending than on the beginning. I mean, come on. It was written in Japanese. Do you think I wanted to burn my brain up writing 3 whole typed pages of Japanese when I sucked at it? Good grief! Of course not! Besides, the assignment didn’t call for something that long. I think it turned out to be a little less than 2 pages. Although the teacher again gave me low marks, I liked this idea as well. So well, in fact, that I never forgot it and eventually wrote it again from scratch.
It was actually changed very little. I kept it as horror and just expanded on the bones from the original story.